Ex-Con Times Two: A Bad Boy MFM Romance – Jay S. Wilder and Bella Love-Wins

Ex-Con

First of all.. Damn! Look at that Cover. Hot!

Find it on Amazon – It’s in Kindle Unlimited

I  liked parts of this story. Two hot boyfriends who rescue you when the bad guys come and try to get you? Go Katelynn! I liked the fact that Love-Wins and Wilder had fun playful sex scenes instead of just writing a book where a girl goes from a virgin to a pro at DP!

The issues that I did have with the story should have been spotted during beta-reads. An example was that after the first weekend Katelynn spent with the guys, that next morning she talks about the few times shes been to the apartment. But, it was the first time! There were several places where the timeline has moved ahead but the characters haven’t.  **Spoiler Alert**  After the first night the guys go out with Katelynn, they are talking about her fake ID and how they can’t fuck around with underage girls, but between seeing the fake ID and this conversation, they tried to fuck her in the bathroom of the bar.  ***  It’s shit like that gets on my nerves. Don’t talk about staying away from someone when 10 pages ago you didn’t care if she was a minor or not. It made me not really like them as much as I would have. They were so obsessed with staying out of prison, but not actually making good choices just to be good.  — Like I said, issues that could/should have been resolved with a good editor and beta readers.

Note: I’ve beta read for a couple of authors and I drove them nuts with notes on type of shit. But, that is the distracting shit that readers get irritated with.

It isn’t very long. The Amazon page says it’s 222 pages, but the book ends at 32%. There are a bunch of books after it though, so if you’re going to purchase it, you’ll get more for your $3.99. I didn’t read them.

 

*When I was looking in my Contents and Devices trying to figure something out with my KU, I noticed that there is a banner under the book that says “Update Available”, so maybe the issues that I had with the book have been fixed. I apparently borrowed it March 17, 2017 and with switching out KU books all this time, never gotten around to reading it. I’m not going to reread it to find out what the update is all about, but maybe the issues that I noticed aren’t there anymore. Maybe it’s a whole new story…. who knows?!  Or, maybe the bonus books aren’t there any more.  I’m glad I read it on KU, because I’d have been irritated and returned the book if I had paid $3.99 for it. :/

 

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